Fem Ring

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It started out a normal enough day.

I got up, put on my pt uniform and headed out for the base. It was in the middle of winter, so we had to wear our sweats. Considering it only started getting cold, I didn't have my sweats on hand so I spent fifteen minutes looking for them. I don't normally mind, but it was raining so I would be cold and wet today. After finally finding my whole pt uniform, I went to start my car, but the battery was dead. Arg!!!

I knew I should have brought the car into the garage last night. Good thing my car is a standard. I just pushed it out of the driveway and popped it in gear to get it going. Well, at least I'm still on time, for now.

As I'm about to get on the freeway, I notice a roadblock and a police officer closing the on ramp. It seems no matter where you go, as soon as the smallest layer of ice forms on the road, everyone forgets how to drive. Needless to say, I was ten minutes late to my early formation and got a chewing from my NCOs. Man, sometimes I wish there was something I could do to make life easier. So now I'm late, cold, wet and apparently today is a run day. Great. How could this day get any better? About twenty minutes into the run, I hit a patch of ice and go flying into the grass in front of the whole company. Amidst the jeers and laughing, I feel like I can't take it anymore and am about to explode from frustration when I notice something glittering in the grass. It looks like a plain gold ring with some writing on it. As I try to take a closer look, my squad leader yells at me to get up and catch up with the formation that is leaving me behind. I quickly toss the ring in my pocket and race to catch up with the rest of my group.

After pt is done and over with I race to my car in an attempt to get back home to shower and change. Today is supposed to be a Class A inspection and I still haven't found my dress socks. I know, I know, procrastination will be the eventual death of me. Hopefully fate is as lazy as I am. Thinking back on the run, I'm glad my secret wasn't found out.

You see, I'm a closet cd and no one but a handful of my close friends know anything about this. I like to wear some 'unauthorized' undergarments during the day if you get my drift. In the rush of showering and changing, I throw my wet pt pants on my apartment floor. After I'm finally done, the socks were behind the couch, funny that, I pick up my wet clothes to hang up when the ring falls out of my pocket. I pick it up to look it over and notice it’s a small ring with a picture the woman symbol, you know the one with the circle and the little cross thing on the bottom, and two little skulls on either side of it. Not thinking anything odd about it, I slip it on with the symbols facing my palm so no one will notice them. Amazingly enough, the ring fits perfect and actually looks good on my slender hands.

Well, before I go on, I guess I should describe myself a bit. Being only 5'6 and barely weighing in at 110 pounds, I'm not the biggest guy in the army. I was always the smallest person in my group regardless of where I went. Middle school, high school, even college. For some reason, I was always the smallest one. Before I joined up, I had long black hair that I used to care for like if it was a lover. I swam and ran fairly regularly, so I was always in shape and quite toned. My facial features are what some would call delicate, and I never did develop any facial hair. Due to all of this, I was always the one that got volunteered for all the less than pleasant things to do in the group. On a couple of occasions, the girls even forced me to go as a cheerleader for Halloween and costume parties. Of course trying to portray that I was all man, I fought tooth and nail and only then did I 'reluctantly' give in. I don't think they ever realized they were making my dreams come true when I dressed up with them, and if they did, they never let on or held it against me.

On the bright side, I was able to keep all the costumes I acquired over the years and played them off as sentimental value to all who asked. I had pictures to show I wasn't the only one in costume in the group so no one would be able to really hold it against me other than weird fun from a weird crowd. So, back to where we were.

I'm driving to work for my class A inspection when I realize I didn't shine my jump boots. Another burden of being in an airborne unit. Have to shine boots for the class A's as well as for my BDUs. I swear, those non airborne units have it easy. Cursing under my breath I mutter, "I wish my boots were always spit shined so I wouldn't have to worry about them."

I didn't notice the slight pink glow radiate from the symbols on my ring, nor the sudden gleam from the now mirror like surfaces of my boots. I also didn't notice the sudden snugness of my dress pants in the hip area until I got out of my car at work. Again, while walking around, I muttered another wish, this time along the lines of needing my uniform tailored to fit better.

Unbeknownst to me, my uniform took a slightly feminine cut and accentuated my now wider hips and shapelier butt and legs. I don't know how I nor any of the people around me didn't notice any of these changes, but it must have been something to do with the ring itself. I went about my day, feeling like there was a slight fogginess in my mind but I couldn't quite place my finger on it. Standing in formation was probably the most grueling portion of Class A inspections. Waiting for all the higher ups to come through and see if anything was off just so they could yell at us and make themselves feel better. Again, I silently wished for my uniform to be perfect so they couldn't gig me on a single thing.

As I stood there, completely oblivious to what was going on, my socks crawled up my legs and formed a garter belt / sheer stocking set and my boots became more feminine looking. Amazingly, out of the whole company, I was the only one who did not get a single thing pointed out as wrong with my uniform. Not even the slightest bit of lint on my jacket. My chain of command was so impressed, they decided to give me a four day pass that weekend. Luckily it was Thursday, and since it was a Class A inspection, we were released for the day as soon as the formation was over. By the time I got in my car, there was about an inch of snow on the roads and I was starting to worry because my tires were getting pretty slick.

A few idle wishes later, I made it safely home. Still completely oblivious to the changes occurring to me, I walked into my apartment and began to undress. I was so glad to get out of my high heels. I swear, standing in snow while wearing a skirt and heels was not the way I wanted to be spending the morning. Luckily, no one saw that I was wearing a garter belt instead of hose today. Getting down to just my bra and panties, I hung up my uniform, put my heels away in their box so I could find them next time I needed them and started cleaning up around my apartment. A few more idle wishes later, my apartment was clean and fresh smelling. I swear, I don't know why I ever let it get to the pigsty it was.

I decided to settle into the tub and take a long luxurious candle lit bubble bath to finish the day on a high point. After my bath, I decided to call it an early night. Putting on my favorite pink nightie, I got my rabbit out my drawer and proceeded to ravish myself. Exhausted, and my pussy still tingling, I slowly started to drift off to sleep. As I lay there, I reflected on how my bad day had ended on a good note. As I was about to fall asleep, the fog in my mind lifted and I sat up screaming in horror . . .

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Blocks of Narrative

Cute story.

Large blocks of narrative scare away readers. For some reason, readers, especially e-readers, prefer short paragraphs.

Stories that start out with a sentence like yours did usually aren't as good as your story turned out to be. You could improve the story by deleting that first sentence.

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Hey Angela!!!!!

Hope Eternal Reigns's picture

Angela dear, sweetie,

Please don't scare off the newbies. Wait until at LEAST the third or fourth story before hitting them with all sorts of writing rules and such 'helpful hints'.

I mean, new talent doesn't grow on trees, eh? It takes an instant of ecstasy followed by nine months in a womb (Which I don't even have.) and then years of schooling and nurturing before someone can entertain us with new and exciting stories.

with love,

Hope

with love,

Hope

Once in a while I bare my soul, more often my soles bear me.

Encouragement is easier

When you can actually read the story. I think I glazed over it as my eyes glazed over. I think it might be a good story, but I'm not sure. :-)

KJT

"Being a girl is wonderful and to torture someone into that would be like the exact opposite of what it's like. I don’t know how anyone could act that way." College Girl - poetheather


"Life is not measured by the breaths you take, but by the moments that take your breath away.”
George Carlin

With Love

New talent needs to know that someone gives a darn about their writing. This writer has a good deal of potential. When I started writing TG stories I had to learn everything on my own. The first four stories I wrote were all in present tense, which didn't work at all. No one said a word -- not one HELPFUL HINT.

Don't "dear", "sweetie" or "LOVE" me -- unless you have something constructive to say.

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Short and sweet

Hope Eternal Reigns's picture

Hi C-tist,

Nice! Slow build-up to a sudden finish.

Thanks for posting this.

with love

Hope

with love,

Hope

Once in a while I bare my soul, more often my soles bear me.

Where do we go from here?

littlerocksilver's picture

Enjoyed the story and I would have to agree with the other comments. Please break it up into shorter paragraphs. It makes it much easier to read. I think what we want to know now is what happens next? :) Portia

Portia

I don't know

Haven't really thought much of how to continue the story. It just popped into my head the other day after getting all banged up working on a humvee.

Never forget, nor allow others to forget what we as soldiers must sacrifice for freedom.

Never forget, nor allow others to forget what we as soldiers must sacrifice for freedom.

Thanks to the members

Of the Armed Forces. I'm the daughter of a vet (Lt. Cmdr - USNR, deceased) and have two older brothers who are vets (1st Lt. - USA, Ret. and Mjr - USAF, Ret.) I have nothing but respect for you and your brother and sister soldiers. Thank You from a grateful U.S. citizen.

Karen J. Taylor

"Being a girl is wonderful and to torture someone into that would be like the exact opposite of what it's like. I don’t know how anyone could act that way." College Girl - poetheather


"Life is not measured by the breaths you take, but by the moments that take your breath away.”
George Carlin

Fem Ring

A cute story, but I wonder how the ring got there and if there are a few more such soldiers at the base?
May Your Light Forever Shine

    Stanman
May Your Light Forever Shine

Nice Start

The one big block of text is daunting but the story was worth. Good job with the slow change and the subtle clues that every time he made a wish he became more feminine. I liked the way how she woke up suddenly aware of all the changes. It could end here but it would be fun to continue on a ways. When she became aware did everyone else too? Since it sounds like she is more or less completely feminized is the ring going to continue granting wishes resulting in Hyper-Femininity? Since we really don't what her MOS or job is in the Army did reality change and give her a new position? Did she lose her jump status seeing how few slots there are for women jumpers?

All of those inadvertent wishes all gone!

Good job!

Hugs!

grover

Interesting concept in the

Interesting concept in the story about a "magical ring". I would wonder however why if it was a Class "A" uniform inspection day that all personnel who lived off base wouldn't carry their Class "A"s to work with them and change on the base; either in their office or in a Barracks (Dorm) room. Would they normally have enough time to go home and change and then come back, especially if the weather was as bad as described? Overall, I did enjoy the story and could easily see another chapter to finish it off or even let it "grow".

Don't worry about

the first sentence, because it sets up the rest of the story, by telling us something else is on the way. The story is written very well, and the images are very vivid. The fem ring was just that; a ring that turns males into females, along with their clothing and rearranges time so that everybody thinks this soldier has always been a female. The ending is what really got to me, and I wasn't expecting it to end like it did. So she sat up screaming because she finally realized that she was now female. Good touch to the ending.

Oh and don't be too harsh on the others, because the hardest audience to entertain with a TG story, is the TG community. It's like a doctor is the worst patient, and a cab driver is the worst passenger, and the worst dining customer is a cook.

This is a very heartfelt write. Oh! And btw, where is MY fem ring. LOL. Thank you for sharing.

Be strong, because it is in our strength that we can heal.

Love & Hugs,

Barbara

"With confidence and forbearance, we will have the strength to move forward."

Love & hugs,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."

A little more insight . . .

On Class A inspection days, most everyone I know wears the uniform to work, sans the coat. We keep that on a hanger up until its time for the actual formation. Very few people I know actually change at work. We usually have enough time to change after pt because they let us know ahead of time so we can have everything set up and ready to wear. That, and the good units usually cut us loose from pt a little early to beat the traffic rush home. I'm no longer in an airborne unit, so I don't get to wear my comfortable jump boots anymore. I guess I got spoiled considering I started off in an airborne unit. I miss the 101st . . . Oh well, atleast you don't have to really shine the dress shoes. Someday I'll go back . . .

p.s. thanks to whoever broke up the story into paragraphs to make it a more comfortable read. . .

Never forget, nor allow others to forget what we as soldiers must sacrifice for freedom.

Never forget, nor allow others to forget what we as soldiers must sacrifice for freedom.

My Apologies

It isn't right for anyone to touch your story without your permission -- even to break it into paragraphs. I didn't do it, but I'm part of this community and apologize for the ill-mannered person who did.

Barbara Lynn Terry is incorrect. The essence of a story is change. To announce that a change is coming in your story is totally unnecessary and announces only that you are an unskilled story teller.

There are three basic reasons you don't start a story like you did.

1.) The reader wants action right from the start. Your first sentence starts the story by stopping.

2.) Good fiction looks forward, not backward. You have started the story by going in the wrong direction.

3.) A good story starts with and deals with the hero being put in peril so she can respond to it. You want to "show" that change is coming, because change is something almost everyone considers to be a threat.

Think of several occasions in your life when you have been scared or worried. Think about how you can use how you felt going into those events to start your story. Remember your story starts with that singular moment of change.

Considering all that, your story seems to start with the sentence that says "Man, sometimes I wish there was something I could do to make life easier." You should probably start your story with that paragraph and delete not only the first sentence, but the entire second paragraph as well. That is the sentence that actually sets up your story, because it tells us that wishing for positive change is part of your nature. It explains without telling what occurs throughout the story.

There are very few rules to writing, but there is a certain logic that prevails, if you want to efficiently convey a message to your readers. If you want to learn how to write, do as I did. Read everything you can set your hands on about the craft. I've read over a hundred how-to books. Subscribe to several writing magazines. Join a writing group with actual published writers. Read the various tutorials on line. Write and then rewrite your material dozens of times to exercise what you've learned. Write a column for a newspaper about something you love, which I do.

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Yep!

I probably disagree with Jill as much or more often than I agree with her, ;-) but this time I think she is spot on. Good advice here, and you could do a lot worse than to listen to her.

KJT


"Life is not measured by the breaths you take, but by the moments that take your breath away.”
George Carlin

A good start, but...

I obviously read this after the text had been broken up, and it read okay to me.

Quite interesting, with a good narrative style. However, some of it was hard work at first because of the language. What is a BDU or a Class A? Fine you can tell me now, but you should always remember that lots of people will read your stories who haven't a clue what you're talking about.

But then I got to the big turn off. It had magic in it! Did you really have to resort to that?

Okay, I know a lot of people do, but if you had added the genre "Magic" to your submission, you wouldn't get people like me - who think magic is pathetic - reading your story and telling you that magic stinks.

Good luck with future writing - you obviously have a lot of talent, but my advice is, avoid the magic. You can do better than that!

Hmmm . . .

You know, not to be mean or rude, but it does say the story involves wishes on the categories part. I figured wishes fell under the magic category. Glad you liked the begining of the story, but I chose magic because it's something I've always wanted to encounter.

Never forget, nor allow others to forget what we as soldiers must sacrifice for freedom.

Never forget, nor allow others to forget what we as soldiers must sacrifice for freedom.