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Bikini Beach: Falling Towards an Abyss Part I

Bikini Beach: Falling Towards an Abyss

Part I

Insight

Story by E. M. Pisek

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Months after Anya's epic fight with Oksana a rift still exists between her and Mel. Within Mel, new feelings are starting to stir which many girls go through. How does Mel handle hers as she learns more of her newfound magic? Then there's Bobby's own budding feelings.

Well its been 2 years

Well its hard to believe but its been 2 years since I last put up anything concerning Mel Covington. I'm not sure if there is much of an interest still, or if others even remember what's she's going through, but I'm planning in the next few weeks to put up another chapter.

I am emotionally inhibited

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There comes a time when a person must be honest with themselves. One is that I'm Emotional Inhibited, thus it makes it hard to put much emotion in my stories except for the same ones over and over again in my writings. I find I have to pilferage others to get a feel of what I want, not even sure if its actually the one I want expressed.

Where did it start? Possibly from being sexually assaulted over the years way back when as a form of living? I'm not wanting to use that for the excuse.

The call goes out for a beta/proof reader

Okay, the call goes out again from me for a beta/proof reader for another Bobby/Mel story line. Be aware that there is one section that I'm still working on but I would like both:

a. The persons thoughts, opinion on where the story went and how it read.
b. Obvious errors, but be aware there are some places that I'm sure I need to place the dreaded comma's and so forth.
c. What went right and what went wrong.

Bikini Beach: Might Have Beens


Bikini Beach: Might Have Beens

Story By Ib12us

What would you do if you felt like a burden to your family? What if you don't remember what happened after visiting Bikini Beach? Another perspective.

Editor, critic needed for story.

I'm sending out a request for someone to look over a story that I'm hoping to be done within the next few days. It's set in the BB universe but is not a Mel story.

What I'm looking for is for someone to critique it as well as offer suggestions on it. Its not looking to be long as I've been wanting to write a 'short' story.

I don't consider it to be one of the standard norms that have been submitted.

Writing the first draft. Is it always

Is it always the beginning of writing a story that's the hardest? Forcing yourself to lay down the words that you want to tell, only to find later as you edit it over that that part is now easier to do then the first time while looking endlessly at a blank screen or piece of paper? Hell even when you had some words down it was hard to continue as you fought the urge to edit what you had.

Bikini Beach: Of hopes and dreams, of friendships lost Part 2 of 2

Bikini Beach: Of hopes and dreams, of friendships lost Part 2 of 2

Story by Ib12us

2nd Revision

We all know what had happened to Anya from her story 'The Temptation of Anya' and the outcome of what Oksana's revenge had done to her.

But what of the effects on others who come to the park? What effects could have been caused intentionally or unintentionally? Here is one such story or several. A story of hopes and dreams. Of love and friendships.

Have you ever wondered?

Have you ever wondered?

Wondering what type of writer you are? Be it the first, third or narrative speaker?

As I look over the writings of various authors that I would like to emulate I find myself asking, 'What type of writer am I? Where does my writing style fit in?'

By this I mean my writing style. Not so much about the first or third person, but more of how I structure the sentences, the selection of certain words vs spreading out the meaning. How compact vs length.

Bikini Beach: Of hopes and dreams, of friendships lost Part 1 of 2


Bikini Beach: Of hopes and dreams, of friendships lost Part 1 of 2

Story by Ib12us

Revised

We all know what had happened to Anya from her story 'The Temptation of Anya' and the outcome of what Oksana's revenge had done to her.

But what of the effects on others who come to the park? What effects could have been caused intentionally or unintentionally? Here is one such story or several. A story of hopes and dreams. Of love and friendships.

Apologies for story.

For those of you that have read my recent submission of a Bikini Beach story. I want to apologize for it. Not for the story itself, but for the grammatical errors that are littered throughout the story. To be honest the story wasn't ready for prime time.

Even though I had caught some items before and even 'revised' it. It still does not meet certain standards and I rushed it. And for that I'm sorry.

Beta Reader.

I am currently working on a story for the BB universe. I am looking to see if someone will be willing to read over the story with critical input. They 'must' be familiar with both Elrod's BB universe and with 'my' characters.

I would say don't be discourage or hampered if I do not reply immediately as I am still in the process of doing some editing an so forth. I will reply to all those interested of course.

Story Rules

When writing stories such as scify and such do we sometimes put in so many rules about ones character that we end up bogging ourselves down with said rules for the sake of the story?

By this I mean as we begin to formulate the story we put in some rules that we don't want to break, which is understandable. But when you put in to many rules does it seem to take the fun away from the writing that you decide to give it up or perhaps revamp the rules so that you have a bit more flexibility?

A mothers loss

My eyes grow weary as I stand before the stone. I have visited it many times before.

The visits don't come easier as time passes by, only knowing what lies before me, to know what he had done for his country and fellow man.

I remember the years before. Days of playing catch out in open fields near our home, each having to run farther as we tried to best or outdo each and every throw.

Scammers are either getting stupider or I'm getting smarter.

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Just received a call from Louisiana, well that's what Caller I D said. Answered and guy called saying he was from the IT department. Yeah we've heard them going around and yes his accent was pretty bad. Said he was calling about my computers operating system. I asked what type of computer I had. Sorry I'm not in the mood to play their little shit game. He said it didn't matter I have Windows OS. I asked what version, said it didn't matter, was the reply. I started on him like crap to the wall. Either he tells me what 'type' of computer I have else he ain't getting crap.

Same as Elrod

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I'm kinda in the same boat as Elrod. As we have asked before and many times it seems we beg for them its the feedback that our readers provide us that keeps us motivated. Without them, good or bad we have no real inclination of whether our stories are having the impact that we are striving for.

If you were to look at mine from the last story about have of the comments are mine in response.

I like the kudo's but they don't provide me or others with how the story is impacting on you the reader.

Bikini Beach: the Temptation of Anya - Part 1


Bikini Beach – The Temptation of Anya
Part 1 – Lovers' Tangle
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Anya meets a girl from the 'Old Country', and the two become friends. But Anya is starting to make mistakes that affect customers, including a college girl and the young man who's been interested in her for a long time. When she really messes up their lives, desperate measures are called for to straighten things out.

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Question concerning stories.

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Due to the sites unfortunate crash along with several days of hard work performed by those creative people to resurrected and breath new life back into its unfortunate demise the question I have is how story posting is being affected.

Case in point is the number of stories that are being posted. This leads me to ask about those that are being pushed further down the pipe than they normally would be. There were several that I'm sure were reposted due to the time differences from A to B.

What to do

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What or how do you work past an issue that makes you uncomfortable. It sounds trivial but for the life of me I cannot seem to, or want to, write scenes that can affect a childs' relationship with his/her parent. I can envision it but I'm unable to put it to paper. I've known several people that have had a poor relationship with theirs but mine was never like that. Its like a stumbling block for when I have to write it. It's essential to the story so there's no way for me to skirt around the issue. Unless the parent is a total bitch (which she is not) I cannot write it.

Something to lighten the mood

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I thought with all that has been happening I'd provide a small exerpt from one of the stories I'm writing. Understand I haven't truly edited it and its still raw. But so you all know Mel is 13 and Dwayne is 14.

Lisa walked into the apartment when she heard the voices coming from the bedroom. That's right shove that piston in. Mel said.

Do you think I used enough lube? The boy asked.

I hope so I don't want it to be scorched. Oh god that feels good. Pump it some more.

Listening the conversation seemed to get worse.

Bikini Beach: Mr. Mom



Bikini Beach: Mr. Mom
Story by Ib12us

Synopsis: Since the death of his wife, a widowed father found there was no one to turn to for help in raising two small children. A co-worker suggests a place to relax where she works part-time, Bikini Beach. Is this a chance for him to understand how to raise a ‘tween daughter?

Bikini Beach: Mr. Mom.
Story by Ib12us

The author is grateful for the help, suggestions and editing done by his editor. As always his touch has enhance my stories.

This story is copyright by the author. It is protected by licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-NonCommercial-NoDerivs 3.0 Unported License.

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Memorial Day

Today we in America celebrate another holiday. Memorial Day. For some it means having to work, while for others it means a day off. For some today is another day they have to work, be it for themselves or their family. For others its a chance to get together and celebrate the coming of summer. Kids thinking of the long days in the sun an having fun with friends. Others will plan summer vacations and hopefully have a chance to recharge from work, away from cell phones, deadlines and other unwanted interruptions. Today may just mean hanging with friends and having a cookout.

Bikini Beach: The Runaway, Part 3/3

Bikini Beach: The Runaway Part 3/3
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A young boy has run away from home. Breaking into Bikini Beach in search of food, he is caught trespassing in the morning and given a week's worth of community service. Why did he run away in the first place? Something has prevented Grandmother and Anya from seeing his past. Maybe a detective who is the great grandson of someone from Grandmothers past can help unravel the mystery.

The author is grateful for the help, ideas and editing done by ElrodW. Without his help and support, this story may not have been possible.

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Bikini Beach: The Runaway, Part 2/3

Bikini Beach: The Runaway Part 2/3
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A young boy has run away from home. Breaking into Bikini Beach in search of food, he is caught trespassing in the morning and given a week's worth of community service. Why did he run away in the first place? Something has prevented Grandmother and Anya from seeing his past. Maybe a detective who is the great grandson of someone from Grandmothers past can help unravel the mystery.

The author is grateful for the help, ideas and editing done by ElrodW. Without his help and support, this story may not have been possible.

Bikini Beach: The Runaway, Part 1/3


Bikini Beach: The Runaway Part 1
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A young boy has run away from home. Breaking into Bikini Beach in search of food, he is caught trespassing in the morning and given a week's worth of community service. Why did he run away in the first place? Something has prevented Grandmother and Anya from seeing his past. Maybe a detective who is the great grandson of someone from Grandmothers past can help unravel the mystery.

This author is grateful for the help, ideas and editing done by ElrodW. Without his help and support, this story may not have been possible. Though the story may seem a little harsh, it's real life, and as such, a perfectly valid theme to be exploring.

Foreward
I have had the pleasure of working with the author in taking a concept through to an edited story. It's been a journey for both of us - dealing with subjects that are not exactly pleasant, but do happen and overshadow some people's lives, and doing so in a setting that I created, but hasn't yet seriously touched these issues. I applaud the author for being brave enough to come face-to-face with some harsh realities in the story, knowing that they may dredge up unpleasant memories for some. I look at the work as a further exploration of the human condition, flawed as we all are, and possibly an opportunity to give people who've had to face situations like the main character a chance for an emotional release, a recognition that others understand your pain and that you are not alone. I want to thank the author for working with me to make sure that Bikini Beach guidelines weren't violated, and that the characterization of the side players was accurate to my vision. I hope you find something that touches you in the story.

ElrodW


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