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I need help to decide/create a suitable title for my latest creation.....

I have given birth to a monster.

A literary monster in the form of a true saga.... I'm up to 85,000 words and still have a long way to go.


***SPOILER ALERT****

If you really don't want to know the plot, then don't read the following. I have left some key elements out, but don't say you weren't warned!


It starts in New York City in 1960. A very young runaway gives birth in a hospital having been helped off the street by a NYPD cop and a taxi driver. Her family, school and church have disowned her because she was pregnant. Just after the birth, the young mother dies, leaving her daughter truly alone in the world.

The plot line jumps forward to 2008. A retired parish priest (the story's narrator) is visited by an attractive American woman that he has never met, and yet she clearly knows him well. She turns out to be the baby from New York.

They have a discussion about an elderly man who died just after the priest originally took office in this particular village, many years before.

Without giving away too much, it turns out that the elderly man had a problem (yes, that one) that he had to live with through the turn of the century, two world wars and up to his death. He clearly wishes earnestly that reincarnation is not only possible, but he wants to come back with the original mistake being rectified.. as a female!

This woman convinced the vicar by producing irrefutable evidence and gstarts telling the old man's full story...
It begins in the early 1900s, in an upper-class private school, progressing to 1914 and the Great War, where our protagonist finds himself up to his behind in mud as an officer in the infantry.

In late 1916, he is cut off during a daring raid behind enemy lines. Trapped and wearing the wrong uniform, the man disguises himself as a female, assuming the name Sabine, and with some abandoned children, struggles to find a way to return to his own lines.

He succeeds, but a Canadian Officer falls in love with his female persona, so he has to escape from the allies too!
Eventually he returns to being who he used to be, (somewhat reluctantly) to find he's been awarded a medal for bravery and reported Missing in action. His CO is delighted to see him back safe and asks for a report of his exploits. He words his carefully, simply saying he disguised himself as a local and managed to evade the enemy until a suitable opportunity presented itself.

On the back of his experience, along with other suitably qualified 'experts' he is sent to America to assist the Americans to get an idea of what kind of a war is being fought in Europe. The political pendulum is swinging towards the US joining, so the US military want to be prepared in case.

While in America, the US military Intelligence is apparently more clued up and having seen his report, see through his wording and correctly assume that he used a female disguise. Discretion is maintained, and so he cooperates with one US Major. He is able to help draw up contingency plans for US personnel who are trapped in similar circumstances.

The Major's sister, (who actually prefers women) however, takes a fancy to our hero, identifying certain qualities in him that she is attracted to, and they become lovers. However, their joy is short lived as he has to return to Europe.. they become engaged just before he leaves.

On arrival in London, he is instructed to report to the War Office.
They were not as dumb as he believed... now asking him to go back into occupied Belgium to seek out intelligence about the German U boats that are plaguing the Atlantic and Mediterranean - the catch? he has to go back as a woman.

Sent to a secluded location to resurrect his alter ego - Sabine
Time spent sneaking about in occupied Belgium, tricking dastardly German officers, helping escaping POWs and finally returning to find the US has joined the fray and his fiancée is now a nurse attached to the US army.

They meet, she sees him as a woman, and sparks (good ones) fly.

End of war.. off to America, fun as flappers - tragedy, back to Britain for WW2. This time as a senior officer with MI19 - set up to assist the evading POWS in occupied Europe.... big jump to end of old man's life.......

...new jump to the girl's life. She retains all the old man's memories, which prove interesting for life in the 1970s and 80s....... marriage, children and true happiness.

Finale is when the elderly vicar visits the woman in her home in America and is brought up to date.


That in a nutshell is the story......

I initially called it

A CHANCE WOULD BE A FINE THING.

Another suggestion is ..

SABINE

I am not convinced that either do it justice.

I'd like some suggestions. Now, I know that there are some excellent minds here (warped maybe, just like me, but still excellent), so please let me have some suggestions. If you like either of the original suggestions, then let me know.

I will credit the person who comes up with the one I select in the book.

Thank you.

Tanya

Comments

Hugs

Liquid Time or Flowing Through Time
Love and Hugs Hanna

Love And Hugs Hanna
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Thanks

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........ good ones, certainly food for thought, I'd not looked at the time angle.

Tanya

There's no such thing as bad weather, just the wrong clothes!

Ok...

How about - "In another life" or "In another lifetime" (Hugs) Taarpa

A fair turn about. To Come

A fair turn about. To Come around right. Turning round right. Turn around right. Fair turn around. I am working off the old Shaker tune Tis a gift to be simple. I will put on my other thinking hat and see if it comes up with something else. I was looking for something with a sweet connotation to it because of the general sweet feeling I got from your outline.

Love
Misha Nova

With those with open eyes the world reads like a book

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1) A War hero's wish. 2)

1) A War hero's wish.

2) Wartime wish of womanhood.

3) War's Wish.

4) His wartime Dream, Her modern life.

5) Life's strange twists.

Yule

Bailey's Angel
The Godmother :p

Titles

Since this seems to be mostly about WWI, I was thinking of something that evoked that. Perhaps "The Fields of Time" mixing Flanders Field and the time thing. I did a search and came back with similar titles none exactly.

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Grover

Titles

"Sabine" could be easily mistaken as a reference to the Sabine Women, and you might want to steer away from it if your story doesn't involve abduction and rape.

I'd try something like "Col. Smith's Return" (adjust name and rank as needed) or maybe get a little more metaphoric and go with a take on "Furlough Request Granted" or "Transferred to a New Regiment," where the surface reading is a military term but the subtext is about changing oneself.

A few thoughts

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Second Time Around
The Last Time I Saw Paris
The Last Time I Wore This Dress
Time and Again
Time and Remembrance
The Spying Game
The Spy with a Run in His Stocking
...And Where She Stops
How Do You Get Off the Merry-Go-Round?

I could think of more but I hope those are enough to jumpstart you're own title machine. :)

Hugs,
Erin

= Give everyone the benefit of the doubt because certainty is a fragile thing that can be shattered by one overlooked fact.

Well

"A Man's Miss Chance". Seems good to me.

Tanya, as this is a tale of reincarnation and second chances...

perhaps something with karma in the title.

Though Karma Chameleon is TOOO much like a song title.

-- grin --

But seriously, as you have parallels between his life *undercover* as a woman and her life where she remembers HIS life with all its ups and downs, chameleon, or some word or phrase suggesting disguise, stealth, the surface not being the same as what is underneath.

Not saying this well am I?

The reincarnation aspect could give you a clue as to a title.

Also is she the only one who was reincarnated? What of the woman he married? The one that saw the duality in him? Has he/she reincarnated before? And if so was he more often female or male? There is the concept of the Wheel of Life? Wheel of Fortune? Nah, the spirit of Merv Griffin would rise from the grave and sue you. And Circle of Life is too Disney. But something that indicates continuity, continuance, the cycle of life death life ... Cycles?

How about Duality? Could work. Or anything else that suggests opposite sides of the same thing.

John in Wauwatosa

John in Wauwatosa

I like the time aspect...

I suggest One More Time, or One More Time, Again.

And I still like the cover idea from La Parisienne. ;-)

Janet

Mistress of the Guild of Evil [Strawberry] Blonde Proofreaders
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To be or not to be... ask Schrodinger's cat.

Title idea's

Two wars and a Wedding

Skirting the Enemy