"The whole point of fiction is to describe change."

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Wow! My date with Phillip is accruing hits with amazing speed. I guess you can read it as a stand alone, and some people must have at least opened it with that in mind because too many people have opened it to have just been those who've read the earlier chapters.

Also, the last blog, Thoughts on Femdom, got a huge number of hits.

Maybe it's just the title.

And how did it end up in a discussion of Janis Joplin?

I first thought I would wait a day or two before posting the next chapter. I figured folks would need some time to digest dinner. =) But I think some momentum has been generated and that I should just let the serious readers plunge ahead. I think this chapter should remove any doubt about whether or not Michael/Sara is a wimp of the kind who might be tricked into submission, like VT's husbands (BTW, if you've never read Jack and Jill, which I believe was her first, you should seek it out - It's the prototype for the stories that have followed but it's rather more raw and passionate).

If you want to understand what this story is about, read what Geoff writes in response to individual chapters and blog posts. IMO, he's got it nailed, and far better than I could have myself. It's amazing what fresh eyes can see.

Here are some samples

"IMO 'Symphony' is primarily about the stresses a deep relationship suffers when one partner finds it necessary to change who they are. Or, perhaps more accurately, to assert who they've always been but suppressed. Right through the story the reader is never really sure what the outcome might be. Both sides in the relationship make mistakes. Kelly Ann explores the mistakes and the responses to them. The final answer always remains in doubt."

Or this

"It isn't fluff; it isn't one-handed fiction; it isn't, except in a very loose way, fem-dom. It is a love story; it is a description of the struggles and compromises two people have to negotiate in order for their relationship to work. . ."

"The whole point of fiction is to describe change. For that reason alone it's unwise to judge a complete story on the strength of a few line in an early chapter. Change is all. It's just how the change affects the characters that remains in doubt until the end. Isn't that how it should be?"

Yes that is how it should be and that is what I intended. Still, I flew too close to the femdom sun and for some my wings seem to have melted and their interest plunged into the sea. I hope that garbled metaphor makes sense.

I guess I better post the next chapter in my continuing quest to establish this on the dry land of serious fiction, although it is surrounded by a sea of femdom.

Whatever.

Comments

I will give it a fair shake

As I posted before -- I think I did, occasionally I lose one to the electronic *ethyr*, I will give this a fair trial.

I may wait for a few more chapters until I do as I am busy with projects for others. From what I did read, and I admit it is only bare fragments of these first five chapters, I can see how the story can push some readers buttons. Remember many of us come to BC with some serious bagage. Anything perceived as coersion, manipulation or forcing people to do things against their will is anathma to many here.

Even when it is done for the best of motives it will rattle some cages here. Angela Rasch's Ma Cherie Amour is a personal favorite but has aspects that upset others and I fully understand why. You have chosen to write about a topic with lots of bittersweets in it and very little win-win.

I have read excellent stories of happy marages and the stress that one partner's transitioning, brought on by themself or given a pushstart by the spouce, has hurt one or both even though in the end it may have been for the best.

Do not be suprised you may need to guide us by the hand though this one.

John in Wauwatosa

John in Wauwatosa

That is a good point...

I think you may have hit the nail on the head with this one. BC is not like Storysite (or any others), at least in the story subject ratio; very thankfully so. As Kelly Ann noted in an earlier post, Storysite has a high percentage of the stories in question (forced fem/fem dom), while BC does not; is there a reason? Could it be that some traders that do not wish to read that kind of story has formed their own "cliques" and found a haven here? Perhaps this is the reason why the responses have been so heated? The stories that have done the best (as rated by the spontaneous number of reads/number of comments, discarding the numbers of requested pleas) have been the lighthearted non-serious ones without the serious angst? Do we come here to rehash real-life, or do we come here to escape reality for just that little amount of time we can grab for ourselves? Thabnk you, John, for putting into words what I could not quite nail down :)

Hugs
Diana

You can't glamorize the losses.

Gwen I was married for 39 years to a woman I loved and still love. Neither she nor any of the children will have anything to do with me now.

Don't mean to sound bitchy because I am not. I have to keep reminding myself that this is a story. The Woman is pushing the man into all this.

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Gwen Brown

Shame On You

You've written a beautiful story that carefully describes an intimate relationship between two people, while playing off those around them.

You set it out as a feast before the masses.

Somehow your guests decided it was okay to state, "Roast duck; I hate roast duck. I especially hate roast duck when it is served by that horrible Vickie Tern."

Roast duck isn't inherently bad and neither is femdom.

The oblique slaps against Vickie Tern are unfortunate as Vickie Tern is a master at telling her kind of story.

What bothers me most is your willingness to say "My bad."

It is extremely accurate and important for the telling of YOUR story for the wife to tell the hero what to do. Hmmmmm. Have any of these readers ever been married? Doesn't the probability of one spouse telling the other what to do GO UP when they feel threatened by and don't understand what the other is doing? When your spouse tells you to lose a little weight, work harder, or be more attentive to your children do you think you are being dominated?

There is no need for you to apologize to anyone. In another thread one of my stories was mentioned concerning this discussion. Several of these same readers/commentors went out of their way to find femdom in my story -- where it didn't exist. Some of them even had the audacity to suggest that I rewrite my story to their taste.

Like that would ever happen!

Not that I haven't written femdom. My story Residue is all about teenage femdom and its horribly devastating impact later in life. Not that I don't enjoy well-written femdom. Your Jacqui is one of my all-time favorites. Even Jacqui is much more about a person's self discovery and growth than it is about the domination or humiliation.

Please. . .please take a page from my book and don't be so darned nice about this. Your story is what it is --- very good. You're one of the top writers who have posted on BC and those who are trying to tear you down seemingly are doing so to maintain a mediocrity that fits their own efforts. We are creatures of self assessment. We sometimes seek to look better by reducing the competition, rather than by trying to improve ourselves.

For those of you who haven't read etiquette books; when served roast duck, something you simply can't stand, you make an effort to eat it, compliment the host and silently leave what you can't eat on your plate. The less said the better.

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Angela Rasch (Jill M I)

Hear, hear!

Your story is just that, your story.

Sometimes the comments intrigue me. They offer advice as to where to go next (if writing a serial) and others offer praise or criticism.

Would I rewrite a story if someone said to because they didn't like the subject matter?

Not on your life.

Femdom in its extreme (in my opinion, coupled with humiliation) is a preference I for one don't share, but I wouldn't ask someone to change their story as a result of coming across it. I would merely cease reading if it affected me that much.

Like watching a film or TV programme, the answer is to shut it off or change channels if you don't like what you're watching.

I agree wholeheartedly with Angela. Unless you are asked to remove said story by Erin, just continue to write as you see fit about things you feel comfortable with.

NB

I agree!

Just because I may not like a story does not mean I think it should ever be taken away. One person's trash is another's treasure and it works both ways. I would only ask that a story be pulled if there were extreme circumstatnces; I am sure some here would agree what those circumstances might be. Keep writing Kelly Ann, and I will try out the next storyline you develop.

Hugs
Diana

Aw shucks

Or is that as dated as the Irish 'begorra'? LOL

My blushes are so bright I'm saving on electricity. Thanks, Kelly Ann but I write as I find and I really believe what I wrote. There are several writers who make my heart beat a little faster when I see a new story. You are amongst them and I think some of your editors figure highly too.

I may be a veggy in RL but I like a bit of metaphorical red, raw meat in my fiction from time to time.

Geoff