I have a collaborator (you know who you are, and you're doing a great job!) who's helping write a new story - it's in work when I find time. Not sure if I'll try to publish for revenue (earn a few $$$) or publish it serially here.

The problem I have is that sometimes I get a little too verbose, and I need someone who can read and then say "this section or paragraph is not needed" or "tighten up the long, boring dialog" or "why don't you narrate it instead of doing the longer dialog thing?" Also any obvious "WTF? This could NEVER happen!" bits.

This is not due to dissatisfaction with my collaborator - not by any means. She's likely to be listed as co-author since she's done so much to help. This is because she and I may be too close to the subject matter and we need an independent set of eyes.

Of course, this would be a strictly confidential effort.