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I have a few thoughts that I want to let you know. The first is that this story of mine isnt entirely original. I got the original idea for this story from Linda Lafrance and her story "The story of Prissy" In that story a sexist boy makes a bunch of nasty comments during a debate and the girls get him back by feminizing him for a weekend. They inflict terrible humiliations on him and he submissively goes though it even in the end, he seems to have no backbone.
So I altered the story, gave him a backbone and another idea of mine (what if he likes dressing, what if he turns out to be a transgendered) So i changed some scenes and the whole main character.
Hey its been done before but then a problem appeared, if he has a backbone, if he is bright and can see whats happening, then it will be much harder to force him to comply so I made the other characters even more vicious. I must say that I am enjoying writing this but I would like to hear how you like what I am doing? Does it majorly suck? I am really trying to make it good and paying more attention to grammar
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So far the story is good.
So far the story is good. If I were you I would make Cissy start to enjoy it more and the girls take notice of that. Then either all hell breaks loose with the girls, or Cissy becomes one of the girls.
Homage...
...is flattery, and there are exactly zero completely original writers.
Please don't apologise for "riffing" (in the Jazz sense) on the work of others. As long as you don't copy great stretches of text, you're doing what every writer does. We learn almost everything worth knowing through copying people who already know how to do it.
Golfers don't learn how to play golf by picking up a club and a ball and visualising everything one might do with them, somehow grokking the essence of golf through Platonic contemplation of the Ideal Game in one's unfettered imagination.
So too, writers learn how to write by reading. Read everything you can. Pick out the writers that you really admire and copy their style. Study how they work the way you might study Tiger Woods, if you wanted to play golf, or Sasha Cohen if you wanted to be an ice skater.
There are only a handful, perhaps two or three handfuls, of basic plots, because we're all human and have the same sets of human problems, or at least *interesting* problems worth writing about. Every story is a variation on one or another of those basic situations. It's how we get there, and whether we enjoy the journey, that counts.
Puddin'
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Here, in a nutshell, are the two sides of writing:
Writing is easy: All you do is sit staring at
a blank sheet of paper until drops of blood
form on your forehead.
--- Gene Fowler
Writing became such a process of discovery
that I couldn't wait to get to work in the morning:
I wanted to know what I was going to say.
--- Sharon O'Brien
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Cheers,
Puddin'
A tender heart is an asset to an editor: it helps us be ruthless in a tactful way.
--- The Chicago Manual of Style
yep
I doubt there's a writer here that couldn't quote a story title as a part of the inspiration for one of their own, a piece that had your thoughts wandering along a perhaps similar path, but they're your thoughts.
As for tags, I tend not to use too many and use the make your own almost always. But getting too descriptive with them sort of limits the journey and in this case; a femdom, humiliation, appliances attached, well it's a fair bet that somewhere down the line a 'rape' of some degree might take place. I don't see telegraphing every possible nasty or potential twist as being a good idea. But yes a caution if the author thinks it may be a big button pusher, suicide and extreme violence for example.
I must admit this one confused me. Your comments above sort of explain it but that doesn't really help. He knows it's a trap, yet walks into it. He likes the idea of dressing so plays along. Yet he threatens revolt then buckles at the slightest retaliation. Cries when slapped and then goes along glares anger and then gets locked in a room... and Mums agreement?. It just don't add up. Sort of a not quite one thing or the other. I wouldn't say it sucks, but it is a bit disjointed. Any story has to have an internal logic and so far I can't follow this ones. Then you can pull it all together as you go and my confusion may clear.
Kristina
Cissy is a fine story
RAMI
I think this story is interesting and well written. Yes, in this chapter, it is hard to tell what Peter, yes Peter, is thinking. He is confused as to how to react and how to act to save himself. But what do you expect in such a situation? Obviously, he enjoyed the initial forced dressing and some "vanilla femdom". But I think, the four b*tches you created went too far. He will need to do something to save himself and get revenge, or he will be destroyed. I want to know there motivation, but more importantly, what is up with mom/ you have created quite a conundrum there.
There are only so many basic themes in any targeted fiction, including TG fiction. With TG fiction there are only really a small group of story lines that are used, the one you picked, is among those. So, don't question yourself and keep on writing. Themes cannot be copyrighted, nor basic story lines.
RAMI
There is Nothing New
It has been my contention for years that when it comes to story telling, there hasn't been anything new since William Shakespeare. So there really is no need to get your knickers all in a twist.
Nancy Cole
"You may be what you resolve to be."
T.J. Jackson
Write what you want
Force-femming a guy who, in the end, kinda-sorta wanted to be femmed, or turned out to be inter-sexed, is a pretty common plot in TG fiction, but don't let that stop you. An imaginative author who can feel the characters can still tell essentially the same basic story, yet make it his own.
Aardvark
"Happiness is when what you think, what you say, and what you do are in harmony."
Mahatma Gandhi
"Happiness is when what you think, what you say, and what you do are in harmony."
Mahatma Gandhi