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Am I posting too soon?

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I've posted all three of my stories here right after writing them and then found errors after they were posted. I also know that I usually do a better job of editing and proofreading if I let something sit for a couple of weeks to get more distance from it. Are you seeing clumsy wording, missing words or other flaws consistently in the stories? I'm thinking of keeping any new stuff for awhile before posting. I'm asking for criticism here and I won't be offended by anything you say (well maybe if you get crude about it).

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Why supper is Late

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I had just started on dinner after a long day at work when Tommy came running into the kitchen with tears and snot running down his face again. “Tommy, what happened?” I asked as I knelt down to lift his five year old body to my breast. Of course, I already had a pretty good idea what was wrong. It was what was wrong way too often.

“Jack was pulling on tiger’s tale an’ tiger bit him an’ I laughed”. Jack is my sister-in-laws seven year old son. They lived across the street from us. Jack was my idea about what was wrong even if the explanation didn’t make sense yet.

The Wrath of Achilles

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This is sequel to An Achean Tale and will make more sense if you read that first. I had no plans to write a sequel but the idea of the unknown tomboy's reaction to the amazons just wouldn't go away. There will not be any more of these. It was too hard to keep this light in a war. I basically just glossed over truths about casualties and the fate of female captives. I read a bowlderized version of the Illiad almost sixty years ago. Since then it has always been a part of the accepted cultural background of my life without ever reading a decent translation. That may have to change.

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