The Gift: A Drabble

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THE GIFT

By Touch the Light

This was my first attempt at a drabble. I won't clog up the front page with it.

It was a mistake.

I felt like crying. I couldn't.

She'd gone without a word.

I still held the gift I'd bought her. She hadn't even looked at it.

Maybe my breath stank of alcohol.

Maybe it was just me.

The street was an alien place. I didn't belong. I walked. I drank. I smoked. I got angry. I still couldn't cry.

I called her. Of course I did.

She didn't answer.

It was time.

I'd be taking a big step. I knew that.

But never again would I feel as alone as I did now.

I dialled the number.

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This is probably more representative of the style to which I aspire than the more verbose offerings I've posted on this site.

The best song ever written about Marilyn Monroe - 10cc's 'Somewhere In Hollywood' - doesn't mention her name. I want to write a tg story that doesn't refer to a sex change.

I'll leave it up to you to decide whether I have the ability to pull that off.

Comments

Touch the Light, please post

The Gift: A Drabble as a story so that we can give you kudos galore.

    Stanman
May Your Light Forever Shine

Thanks but it really isn't

Thanks but it really isn't that good.

And I'm not all that bothered about 'kudos' numbers - which is just as well, considering how many 'Sylvia' got. Apart from ch 2 of 'The Transmigration of Richard Brookbank' it's probably the best thing I've ever written.

But I appreciate your comment nonetheless.

Rich

Ban nothing. Question everything.

Too personal to be mere fiction...

Andrea Lena's picture

I'd be taking a big step. I knew that.

But never again would I feel as alone as I did now.

Your words always seem to give voice to my heart. Thank you!

  

To be alive is to be vulnerable. Madeleine L'Engle
Love, Andrea Lena

This deserves a fuller reply.

This deserves a fuller reply. Thank you for such a heart-wearming comment.

Ban nothing. Question everything.